She pretends to be fine
hoping that he cant see through her mind.
I should have learned to shield my heart
Now every time I see you, I can’t help but fall apart.
The truth hurts more than your lies
Our past is left to hover in the October skies.
-2011
Been there
I have officially read my first poem on WordPress! I have several thoughts at once:
• Wow, this hits hard. A tragic heartbreak and its lingering pain…
• Written in 2011?! I don’t think I even started writing poetry until 2012.
— May I ask how long you’ve been writing poetry?
• The meter is a little off and the third person switches to first. Is this the raw, unedited version of the poem? It looks sort of like my own poetry when I first get it onto the page.
— I’ve no qualms with poetry as such. In fact, editing my own poetry for publication is by far the hardest, most painful thing I’ve ever done in writing.
Cheers! I want to make some time to read more of your work soon.
~ Adeline
I probably started writing poetry back in 2006 or 07. This is two sections of one longer poem which is why it switches from third person. Plus I hate editing. Thanks for the in-depth comment!
Thank you for sharing 🙂 I hope to pick your brain as I read more of your work. I’ll try not to be too wordy!
Serene.
Well written, beautifully expressed!
Lovely lovely…
that was beautiful,
Deep sense ,well written.. never wanna to be in that stage
Your words reach out to all of us because we have all been there in some way, directly or indirectly.
Beautifully written!